Marine Survival Equipment

Here are the four jobs that I am considering I have done some research on all of them but it would be nice to hear from people who may have a more personal experience with any of the four. What are your opinions, if it were you what you pick and why? Oh yes and this is for the marine corp

combat correspondent mos 4341
water safety/survival instructor mos 0918
Tank crewman mos 1812
Cryongenics Equipment Operator mos 6074
I reported you stinky
No he wasnt, that was rude and disrespectful and im reporting you too, your answer has nothing to do with my question

wow, not bad. i cant think you will go wrong either way.

tank crew means you will be crammed into a small space with 4 other dudes. its very hard. you are hot, sweaty and dont get to wash. its a tough life but

its fun!

cryo seems really cool and high tech. combat correspondent is journalism basically. you will get a camera and a laptop and you report the news.

water safety is like a lifeguard.

i say think carefully, its your life. good luck and you will have fun no matter what. its up to you as to what you really want to do.

tanks are fun. the m1 is rare. remember, if youre in the military, might as well do military things civilians only see in the movies. where in the civilian life do you get to drive a tank and shoot down targets?

2009-07-19 22:03:23 by Bettie

Created for the commercial fishing and workboat industries, the Marine Survival Equipment Training Program provides vessel operators with ...

Can you point out any grammatical mistakes?
Or maybe some suggestions?


It is self evident that mankind is blatantly abusing and wreaking havoc on Mother Nature when they should rightfully be grateful for her kindness and return the favor. Man’s misuse is now reaching its climax, and it is unbearably hard to overlook what they’re doing. One example of the effect of their maltreatment is the endangered Galapagos Penguin. Galapagos Penguins live just north of the equator, on the Isabella and Galapagos islands. Less than 1,000 breeding pairs remain nowadays, and Galapagos Penguins are put to the brink of extinction due to the misconducts of humanity. Specifically, oil spills and introduced animals caused by man kind are the two major threats to these blameless penguins.
First off, oil spill is one of the causes engendered by humanity that caused the Galapagos Penguins to be endangered. Animal rights activists say “40,000 penguins are estimated to be killed by oil pollution along the coast of Argentina every year.” According to the International Penguin Conservation Work Group, an organization which aims on promoting penguin conservation worldwide, not only does oiling cause penguins’ eggs to die or deform, but it also affects the food chain by contributing to a reduction in the penguin’s prey. A repulsive fact of oil pollution is that most of the oil spill are caused by deliberately operational discharges, which oil tankers discharge oily water into the sea before loading up with fresh oil, simply because it’s time consuming.
Additionally, animals introduced by humans pose threat to many lives of the rare Galapagos Penguins. Such animals are feral cats, dogs and rats. According to MarineBio, a nonprofit volunteer marine conservation and science education group since 1998, “penguins may mate as often as every 6 months. Female penguins lay 1-2 eggs each season.” Galapagos Penguins are slow breeders. Thus, because of introduced animals attacking the vulnerable chicks and eggs, the entire population could fail to breed at all.
However, not all of us are inflicting harm on the Galapagos Penguins. In fact, some people group and organizations are striving to preserve the lives of these penguins. Conservationists and ecologists say it is yet late to regret our deeds and we can make amends for the brutality some of us struck on these innocent, guiltless penguins. To settle this problem, there are two practical solutions that will turn out effective if we act promptly.
One solution is, according to Anthony Palmiotti, director of education at the SUNY Maritime College who teaches oil spill cleanup, “Training and more training helps prevent accidents.” Training officers must ensure that formal instruction is provided to key personnel who maintain and operate pollution control equipment. This will preclude oil spills from happening by reducing the chance of oily water getting discharged into the sea. A key point to keep in mind is that employers must to hire trustworthy workers so that oil spills won’t occur due to one’s laziness.
Another solution is to establish eradication and control programs for introduced animals. According to Charles Darwin Foundation, an association which has the world’s largest eradication/restoration program, these programs will “contribute to the restoration of the Galapagos ecosystem.” Such programs will improve the survival of Galapagos Penguins by balancing the population of introduced animals such as cats or dogs.
We humans are obliged to help the endangered Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. It is unfair that these creatures suffer from our selfishness and ruthlessness. Some of us are doing a marvelous job in attempting to preserve the Galapagos Penguins, but many of us can surely do more. All of us must try to be more heedful and altruistic, so oil spills will not occur by accident or by our laziness. The least we can do is become aware of this problem and support those who struggle to resolve this difficulty. If ecologists, conservationists, and all of us follow the steps aforementioned, we will be able to inhibit Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. Nevertheless, we don’t have time to even hesitate for a fraction of a second. Every minute passing by is another minute fraught with danger to the Galapagos Penguins. We must act to rescue these penguins, and we must act now!

Good paper! I like it!

One thing I would like to point out (though I don't know if it applies with it being a quote) is that numbers should be written out if they are under a hundred.

"First off, oil spill is one of the causes engendered by humanity that caused the Galapagos Penguins to be endangered. "
Something about the two 'causes' in the sentence. Maybe change one to a synonym? 'Induced' is a good choice.

"A repulsive fact of oil pollution is that most of the oil spills are caused by deliberately operational discharges, which means that oil tankers discharge oily water into the sea before loading up with fresh oil simply because it’s time consuming."
Again, maybe change the second discharge? Unload, empty, release..?

This is all I really saw. Just trying to help out. You don't have to change them, but I do think it sounds better and makes you sound even more bright when you use different words.

2009-04-11 22:50:11 by sungwanc

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It is self evident that mankind is blatantly abusing and wreaking havoc on Mother Nature, when they should rightfully be grateful for her kindness and return the favor back to her. Their misuse is now reaching its climax, and it is unbearably hard to overlook what they are doing. One example of the effect of their maltreatment is the endangered Galapagos Penguin. Galapagos Penguins live just north of the equator, on the Galapagos and Isabella islands. Less than 1,000 breeding pairs remain nowadays, and they are put to the brink of extinction due to the misconducts of humanity. Specifically, oil spills and introduced animals caused by man kind are the two major threats to these blameless penguins.
First off, oil spill is one of the causes engendered by humanity that put the Galapagos Penguins into such a situation. Animal rights activists say 40,000 penguins are estimated to be killed by oil pollution along the coast of Argentina every year. According to MarineBio, a nonprofit volunteer marine conservation and science education group since 1998, not only does oiling cause penguin’s eggs from either dying or deforming, but it also contributes to the reduction of the penguin’s preys. A repulsive fact of oil pollution is that most of them come from deliberately operational discharges, which oil tankers discharge oily water into the sea before loading up with fresh oil, simply because it’s time consuming.
Additionally, animals introduced by human poses threat to many lives of the rare Galapagos Penguins. Such animals are feral cats, dogs and rats. According to the International Penguin Conservation Work Group, an organization which aims on promoting penguin conservation world-wide, Galapagos Penguins are slow breeders, the birth rate only 1.3 chicks per year. Thus, because of introduced animals attacking the vulnerable chicks and eggs, the entire population could fail to breed at all.
However, not all of us are inflicting harm on the Galapagos Penguins. In fact, some people group and organizations are striving to preserve the lives of these penguins. Conservationists and ecologists say it is yet late to regret our deeds and making amends for the brutality some of us struck on these innocent, guiltless penguins. To settle this problem, there are two practical solutions that will turn out effective if we act promptly with enthusiasm.
First, training officers must ensure that formal training is provided to key personnel who maintain and operate pollution control equipment. This will preclude oil spills from happening by reducing the chance of oily water getting discharged into the sea. A key point to keep in mind is that employers must make sure to hire trustworthy workers so that oil spills won’t occur due to one’s laziness.
Another solution is we could establish eradication and control programs for introduced animals. According to the Charles Darwin Foundation, an association which has the world’s largest eradication/restoration program, these programs will help restore the ecosystems of the Galapagos Penguins. Such programs will improve the survival of Galapagos Penguins, since it will balance the population of introduced animals.
We humans are obliged to help the endangered Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. It is unfair that these creatures suffer from our selfishness and ruthlessness. Some of us are doing a marvelous job in attempt to preserve the Galapagos Penguins, but many of us can do more. All of us must try to be more heedful and altruistic, so oil spills will not occur by accident or by our laziness. The least we can do is become aware of this problem and support those who struggle to resolve this difficulty. If ecologists, conservationists, and all of us follow the steps aforementioned, we will be able to inhibit Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. Nevertheless, we don’t have time to even hesitate for a fraction of a second. Every minute passing by is another minute fraught with danger to the Galapagos Penguins. We must act to rescue these penguins, and we must act now!

Overall, I think that this essay is very well written. You have a very rich vocabulary and the evidence is great in your essay. I think that you could get an A for this, but then again I don't know what grade you're in, but I think that for any grade level this is a good essay.

I would like to point out some areas that I noticed that I think will help to improve your essay.

You have a typo where it says,
"Additionally, animals introduced by human poses threat to many lives of the rare Galapagos Penguins."

I think it should say humans pose, instead of human poses because it isn't just one human/person that is introducing the animals.


Also, you wrote:
"According to the International Penguin Conservation Work Group, an organization which aims on promoting penguin conservation world-wide,"

I'm almost positive that world-wide doesn't need a hyphen because worldwide is one word.


You wrote:
"Conservationists and ecologists say it is yet late to regret our deeds and making amends for the brutality some of us struck on these innocent, guiltless penguins."

The phrase yet late doesn't really make sense in the sentence.
Or you could keep the phrase yet late, but also the verbs regret and making are not in agreement because one is in present tense (making) and regret is not.


You wrote:
"We humans are obliged to help the endangered Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct."

I think that it should say We, humans because there is a pause in the sentence when I say it. In between the we and humans, I put a comma.

I hope that this helped.

2009-04-06 07:39:42 by Sung Wan C

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I'm a freshmen student in high school, and my essay is about penguins. Feel free to point out any mistakes/suggestions xD



It is self evident that mankind is blatantly abusing and wreaking havoc on Mother Nature when they should rightfully be grateful for her kindness and return the favor. Man’s misuse is now reaching its climax, and it is unbearably hard to overlook what they are doing. One example of the effect of their maltreatment is the endangered Galapagos Penguin. Galapagos Penguins live just north of the equator, on the Galapagos and Isabella islands. Less than 1,000 breeding pairs remain nowadays, and Galapagos Penguins are put to the brink of extinction due to the misconducts of humanity. Specifically, oil spills and introduced animals caused by man kind are the two major threats to these blameless penguins.
First off, oil spill is one of the causes engendered by humanity that put the Galapagos Penguins into such a situation. Animal rights activists say 40,000 penguins are estimated to be killed by oil pollution along the coast of Argentina every year. According to the International Penguin Conservation Work Group, an organization which aims on promoting penguin conservation worldwide, not only does oiling cause penguin’s eggs to die or deform, but it also affects the food chain by contributing to a reduction in the penguin’s prey. A repulsive fact of oil pollution is that most of them come from deliberately operational discharges, which oil tankers discharge oily water into the sea before loading up with fresh oil, simply because it’s time consuming.
Additionally, animals introduced by humans pose threat to many lives of the rare Galapagos Penguins. Such animals are feral cats, dogs and rats. According to MarineBio, a nonprofit volunteer marine conservation and science education group since 1998, Galapagos Penguins are slow breeders. Female penguins lay one or two eggs each season. Thus, because of introduced animals attacking the vulnerable chicks and eggs, the entire population could fail to breed at all.
However, not all of us are inflicting harm on the Galapagos Penguins. In fact, some people group and organizations are striving to preserve the lives of these penguins. Conservationists and ecologists say it is yet late to regret our deeds and make amends for the brutality some of us struck on these innocent, guiltless penguins. To settle this problem, there are two practical solutions that will turn out effective if we act promptly with enthusiasm.
First, training officers must ensure that formal training is provided to key personnel who maintain and operate pollution control equipment. This will preclude oil spills from happening by reducing the chance of oily water getting discharged into the sea. A key point to keep in mind is that employers must make sure to hire trustworthy workers so that oil spills won’t occur due to one’s laziness.
Another solution is we could establish eradication and control programs for introduced animals. According to the Charles Darwin Foundation, an association which has the world’s largest eradication/restoration program, these programs will help restore the ecosystems of the Galapagos Penguins. Such programs will improve the survival of Galapagos Penguins, since it will balance the population of introduced animals.
We humans are obliged to help the endangered Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. It is unfair that these creatures suffer from our selfishness and ruthlessness. Some of us are doing a marvelous job in attempting to preserve the Galapagos Penguins, but many of us can surely do more. All of us must try to be more heedful and altruistic, so oil spills will not occur by accident or by our laziness. The least we can do is become aware of this problem and support those who struggle to resolve this difficulty. If ecologists, conservationists, and all of us follow the steps aforementioned, we will be able to inhibit Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. Nevertheless, we don’t have time to even hesitate for a fraction of a second. Every minute passing by is another minute fraught with danger to the Galapagos Penguins. We must act to rescue these penguins, and we must act now!

It is evident that mankind is blatantly abusing and wreaking havoc on Mother Nature when we should be grateful for her kindness and return the favor. Man’s misuse (of what?) is now reaching its climax, and it is unbearably difficult to overlook what we are doing. One example of the effect of our maltreatment is the endangered Galapagos Penguin. Galapagos Penguins live just north of the equator, on the Galapagos and Isabella islands. Less than 1,000 breeding pairs remain nowadays, and the Galapagos Penguins are now on the brink of extinction due to the misconducts of humanity. Specifically, oil spills and introduced animals are the two major threats to these blameless penguins.

First off, oil spills are one of the causes that endangered and put the Galapagos Penguins into such a situation. Animal rights activists say that an estimated 40,000 penguins are killed by oil pollution along the coast of Argentina every year. According to the International Penguin Conservation Work Group, an organization which aims on promoting penguin conservation worldwide, not only does oiling cause penguins' (the apostrophe goes AFTER the s because you are talking about many penguins' eggs and not just one penguin's eggs) eggs to die or deform, but it also affects the entire food chain by contributing to a reduction in the penguins' prey. A repulsive fact of oil pollution is that most of it comes from deliberately operational discharges, which occurs when oil tankers discharge oily water into the sea before loading up with fresh oil simply because it’s less time consuming.

Additionally, animals introduced by humans pose a threat to many of the rare Galapagos Penguins. Such animals include feral cats, dogs and rats. According to MarineBio, a nonprofit volunteer marine conservation and science education group since 1998, Galapagos Penguins are slow breeders. Female penguins lay one or two eggs each season. Thus, because of introduced animals attacking the vulnerable chicks and eggs, the entire population could fail to breed at all.

However, not all of us are inflicting harm on the Galapagos Penguins. In fact, some people group and organizations are striving to preserve the lives of these penguins. Conservationists and ecologists say it is not too late to make amends for the brutality that some of us struck on these innocent, guiltless penguins. To settle this problem, there are two practical solutions that could be greatly effective if we act promptly and with enthusiasm.

First, training officers must ensure that formal training is provided to key personnel who maintain and operate the pollution control equipment. This will preclude oil spills from happening by reducing the chance of oily water getting discharged into the sea. A key point to keep in mind is that employers must make sure to hire trustworthy workers so that oil spills won’t occur due to one’s laziness.

Another solution is that we could establish eradication and control programs for introduced animals. According to the Charles Darwin Foundation, an association which has the world’s largest eradication/restoration program, these programs will help restore the ecosystems of the Galapagos Penguins. Such programs will improve the survival of Galapagos Penguins by balancing the population of introduced animals.

We humans are obliged (or do you mean obligated?) to help the endangered Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. It is unfair that these creatures suffer from our selfishness and ruthlessness. Some of us are doing a marvelous job in attempting to preserve the Galapagos Penguins, but many of us can surely do more. All of us must try to be more heedful and altruistic, so oil spills will not occur by accident or by our laziness. The least we can do is become aware of this problem and support those who struggle to resolve this difficulty. If ecologists, conservationists, and the rest of us follow the steps aforementioned, we will be able to inhibit Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. Nevertheless, we don’t have time to even hesitate for a fraction of a second. Every minute passing by is another minute fraught with danger to the Galapagos Penguins. We must act to rescue these penguins, and we must act now!

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Pretty good essay. My only proble was at the beginning when you were referring to humans as "they" -- as if you're some extraterrestrial being or something. Ha-ha. Other than that, everything was great. I put some notes in parentheses and I changed a few words and prhases along the way.

2009-04-10 08:28:47 by Sung Wan C

It is self evident that mankind is blatantly abusing and wreaking havoc on Mother Nature when they should rightfully be grateful for her kindness and return the favor. Man’s misuse is now reaching its climax, and it is unbearably hard to overlook what they are doing. One example of the effect of their maltreatment is the endangered Galapagos Penguin. Galapagos Penguins live just north of the equator, on the Galapagos and Isabella islands. They are the only penguins that live on the equator, and they are the 3rd smallest penguin in the world. Less than 1,000 breeding pairs remain nowadays, and Galapagos Penguins are put to the brink of extinction due to the misconducts of humanity. Specifically, oil spills and introduced animals caused by man kind are the two major threats to these blameless penguins.
First off, oil spill is one of the causes engendered by humanity that put the Galapagos Penguins into such a situation. Animal rights activists say 40,000 penguins are estimated to be killed by oil pollution along the coast of Argentina every year. According to the International Penguin Conservation Work Group, an organization which aims on promoting penguin conservation worldwide, not only does oiling cause penguins’ eggs to die or deform, but it also affects the food chain by contributing to a reduction in the penguin’s prey. A repulsive fact of oil pollution is that most of them come from deliberately operational discharges, which oil tankers discharge oily water into the sea before loading up with fresh oil, simply because it’s time consuming.
Additionally, animals introduced by humans pose threat to many lives of the rare Galapagos Penguins. Such animals are feral cats, dogs and rats. According to MarineBio, a nonprofit volunteer marine conservation and science education group since 1998, Galapagos Penguins are slow breeders. Female penguins lay one or two eggs each season. Thus, because of introduced animals attacking the vulnerable chicks and eggs, the entire population could fail to breed at all.
However, not all of us are inflicting harm on the Galapagos Penguins. In fact, some people group and organizations are striving to preserve the lives of these penguins. Conservationists and ecologists say it is yet late to regret our deeds and make amends for the brutality some of us struck on these innocent, guiltless penguins. To settle this problem, there are two practical solutions that will turn out effective if we act promptly with enthusiasm.
First, training officers must ensure that formal training is provided to key personnel who maintain and operate pollution control equipment. This will preclude oil spills from happening by reducing the chance of oily water getting discharged into the sea. A key point to keep in mind is that employers must make sure to hire trustworthy workers so that oil spills won’t occur due to one’s laziness.
Another solution is we could establish eradication and control programs for introduced animals. According to the Charles Darwin Foundation, an association which has the world’s largest eradication/restoration program, these programs will help restore the ecosystems of the Galapagos Penguins. Such programs will improve the survival of Galapagos Penguins, since it will balance the population of introduced animals.
We humans are obliged to help the endangered Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. It is unfair that these creatures suffer from our selfishness and ruthlessness. Some of us are doing a marvelous job in attempting to preserve the Galapagos Penguins, but many of us can surely do more. All of us must try to be more heedful and altruistic, so oil spills will not occur by accident or by our laziness. The least we can do is become aware of this problem and support those who struggle to resolve this difficulty. If ecologists, conservationists, and all of us follow the steps aforementioned, we will be able to inhibit Galapagos Penguins from becoming extinct. Nevertheless, we don’t have time to even hesitate for a fraction of a second. Every minute passing by is another minute fraught with danger to the Galapagos Penguins. We must act to rescue these penguins, and we must act now!

Hmm...are in text citations required?

In formal writing you should not use pronouns like I, we, us, etc.

Only state absolute facts. Never support an argument with oopinions.

Overall good job.

2009-04-11 08:46:30 by Sung Wan C